Here is feedback I provided a client on the first draft of their personal statement.
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Three things I’m doing in the feedback below:
I ask about terms the reader may not know. An unfamiliar word should not get in the way of understanding your experience.
I push past labels. If you want the reader to see discipline, show what you did. Let the story make the point.
I also check the timeline and your role. When did this happen? What did you actually do? The reader should not have to guess.